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December 30, 2009 08:47 AM UTC
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heartfelt and that counts for a lot.
and stellar bang up job on healthcare reform. No really, top notch. After all that great work on behalf of the American people it is only appropriate that you get some quality time navel gazing and writing poetry.
No more support for you !
Don’t quit your day jobs!
Good points, though!
to critique an elected’s poetry….
Let me first say this critic prefers poetry where dicipline of verbage and meter trump sentimental overreaching.
Your meter is atrocious, your syntax stilted and if you’re going to use rhyme, make it symetrical or patterned in some way rather than finding rhymes for rhyming sake.
While the sentiment and the feelings are legitimate and heartfelt, and the challenging environment you find yourself in daily shows through – stick to politics.
A poem’s style says a lot about the poet and your style is free forming yet fighting the edges. There is structure only in a way a dust devil swirls – a spiral of wind with no set point of reference. Your words reflect the frustration of finding balance yet you can’t recognize what needs to stay and what should go.
You try to tie together complexities without having the discipline to see the basics. If you wish to disregard the basics, find the discipline necessary for a different style.
Poetry isn’t just forming words into stanzas, it is about finding the right words, in the right meter that captures the theme you need to say.
To put it another way, you’re writing a bill without looking at the prior work done that would make the bill better.
In this humble critic’s opinion, after wading through the muddy musings, the final paragraphs of your poems say everything you need to:
With all that said, Happy New Year to you and wishes that you’re able to find the style that not only fits you but fits your job as you continue the good fight.
I just had no idea you were such a poetry critic Car. Happy New Year to you too.
The Congressman asked for a critique, and Car 31 served him well.
The Congressman’s post came right after my wife and I were analyzing the trochaic octameter of Poe’s “The Raven”.
Yeah, date night at my place is a hoot!
Happy New Year RSB – may the new year bring many more of your posts to COPols!
…go ahead and steal everything I was going to say. And feel free to take credit for it; I don’t mind.
🙂
Thank you Car31, I always took you to be more of a legal type, but it sounds like you have a good grounding in literary analysis!
than what is shown on this blog.
I’ve always loved reading and studying poetry – it seems to me the purest form of communication, yet the hardest form to master.
I guess the same could be said about writing legislation….
“I had a lover’s quarrel with the world.”
I really do. That’d make a great sig line.
Here it comes….gag reflex upchuck.
It’s one thing to be filthy rich from a web business. That’s great. It’s another to flip-flop on issues that matter to people who are hurting during Depression 2.0 (those who are not lobbyists, millionaires, or otherwise beholden). Then, it’s still another to write fish-wrap poetry about the suffering and strife while it’s happening, and you continue to vote whichever way has the most lobbying.
Had I but a sliver’s smidgen of Mr. Polis’ flatulent yearnings at competent poesy I should quiver in my pointed boots! This lurching is no more congruent than an acrobat is in a polio ward, sir. I beg you return to the 2nd District’s ether, that my ears may stop their infernal ringing.
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I’m no judge of poetry or any sort of art, but you have shown great courage to put your poems in front of this opinionated and occasionally tactless audience. Kudos.
It takes courage to post anything for the public to rip into. For that alone, I give a big thumbs up to Jared.
is almost as bad as Steve Harvey’s.
Not quite, but in the case of Steve Harvey’s poetry, “almost” ought to send you back to your day job.
Feeling obliged to prove the above point (about my poetry, not yours), here’s an adaptation of one I originally wrote with a different final verse and a campaign fund-raising punchline:
Land of ruddy red rock and river,
Of ores and lores and scores from thither,
Of fruits of the mind left on the vine to wither,
Of too many who stand but too few who deliver;
Now it is time to at last leave behind
The politics bereft of reason and rhyme,
The poisonous fruits of ideologies blind,
Which seek to exalt the crude and unkind;
It’s time, instead, to be well-advised,
To examine the systems of which we’re comprised,
To derive our policies from thought well-apprised,
And become harmonious, healthy, and wise;
May the new year see us joined in shared cause,
Fighting the good fight to pass the best laws,
Pulling ourselves back from these Hobbesian jaws,
Holding out helping hands, not self-serving claws;
May those who thrive on the pain of others,
Strive instead to become as sisters and brothers;
May hearts open wide and minds learn to grow,
And pettiness melt like late summer snow.
-steve
Thanks for posting your poetry Steve!
I like your last stanza best.
Jred
n/t
We all see.
Do us a favor JP–vote down any health care “reform” bill that comes through the House, especially if it looks anything like the current Senate bill, and then get out of politics.
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